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The damage you had done

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"I run a mount to meet you
When I knew the storm had come
I felt the rain on your face
And the damage you had done

I know what you're thinking
This will never be the end
And when the storm is over
You won't see me again


I felt Tempest before I saw her. She wasn't in control of herself, that much was certain. She didn't know the true extent of her powers. I tracked her disorganised thoughts though the city, trying desperately to block out the people around me. The constant background hum of life. I knew I would be too late the moment I felt the first drop of water on the back of my neck but still I ran.
Tempest knew it would be too late too. I could feel her panic. Her frustration. Her guilt. I thought the guilt was the worst until the screams came.
The silent screams. It feels strange to describe an emotion as a scream, but there really is no better way. It was painful. The confusion of the masses. The calm of the insane. The curiousity of the innocent.
I turned the corner and saw Tempest standing in the street. The rain drenching her as she begged it to stop. I could taste the first roll of thunder.
"What the hell are you doing?" I called, I could summon no other words. These seemed to do in most situations. I winced at the concentation of her emotions as they hit me.
"The rain won't stop!" She screamed, "I didn't start this! It wasn't me! It wasn't me!"
But we both knew her protests would do her no good, I was as assured of her guilt as she was. Neither of us wanted to believe it.
She shot me a disparing glance. "How do I stop?" She whispered. I shook my head.
"I don't think you can."
We looked at each other and in that moment the pain overcame me and I laughed.
"Stop laughing! Stop it right know!" Tempest squealed. The lighting rippled across the grey expanse of the sky as she spoke.
"I'm sorry. It's just so ridiculous!" A thought came to me, "Are we sleeping?"
"We can't both be having the same dream." She replied solemnly
"Right. Oh. So we're dead?"
She grimaced. "That's the ultimate outcome, yes."
I tried to feel enraged but the only emotion of my own I could feel was confusion. I laughed again. The insanity took hold. At least I'll never have to regain my mind again,I thought. And then it was black.
Lyrics - Every time you go by Ellie Goulding
Copyright © Warner/chappell Music Publishing Lt

Well... this is interesting... My mind comes up with strange things.
I'm not sure if Tempest and the narrator actually survive this. I think I'll go back and save them if there's enough interest in the story but otherwise I might just let them die in the storm...
O WAIT
The narrator for this part is Zane. I'm not sure I got his narrative voice right... his character has developed an awful lot since I wrote this.
The rest of the story
Chapter 1
Part 1 of 2: [link]
Part 2 of 2: [link]
Chapter 2
Part 1 of 1: [link]
Chapter 3
Part 1 of ?: [link]
© 2012 - 2024 Morgana-Jones
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TrueishColours's avatar
Is this fanfiction for something?
It seems a lot more accomplished technically than the last thing I read by you. You're improving! Excellent. The punchy short sentences really conveyed a sense of drama, and I'm intrigued by this world of people apparently sensing each other's emotions, or at least these two.
'I knew I would be too late the moment I felt the first drop of water on the back of my neck.' Fantastic, conveying disaster and hopelessness through a tiny sign. That really built tension. I enjoyed this snippet!
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